Brian said a woman (not his usual teacher) came to class today and taught them about Telling sentences and Showing sentences. Maybe some of you already know this technique of descriptive writing, but I had never heard of it before.
The room was messy, is a Telling sentence. A Showing sentence would go like this, Clothes and socks were littered all around the room and it looked like a tornado had passed by.
These two were Brian's attempts.
Telling: The lightning flashed all over.
Showing: The whole village was lighted up as the flash of electricity came out from the dark clouds above.
Telling: The rose was so red, so delicate.
Showing: The tender young bud was as red as a strawberry in summer, and its stem was so fragile that it looked like it would snap at a single touch.
I've never been good at descriptive writing, not sure if it would have helped knowing this technique. It probably comes more naturally to some than others I suppose.