Friday, March 28, 2008

Show or Tell

Brian said a woman (not his usual teacher) came to class today and taught them about Telling sentences and Showing sentences. Maybe some of you already know this technique of descriptive writing, but I had never heard of it before.

For example:

The room was messy
, is a Telling sentence. A Showing sentence would go like this, Clothes and socks were littered all around the room and it looked like a tornado had passed by.

These two were Brian's attempts.

Telling: The lightning flashed all over.
Showing: The whole village was lighted up as the flash of electricity came out from the dark clouds above.

Telling: The rose was so red, so delicate.
Showing: The tender young bud was as red as a strawberry in summer, and its stem was so fragile that it looked like it would snap at a single touch.

I've never been good at descriptive writing, not sure if it would have helped knowing this technique. It probably comes more naturally to some than others I suppose.

4 comments:

Alcovelet said...

Lilian, the imagery Brian conjures in my head is remarkable!! He's obviously a well read young man, among other things!

Lilian said...

Thanks Adeline. He's always done well at assigned writing tasks. But getting him to write voluntarily, eg a journal, is like squeezing water out of rock. He'd much rather spend his time reading.

My Gems said...

Hi Lilian, can I fly my kids over to you? :)

Brian's really brilliant!

Lilian said...

Aiyah Vivian, what are you talking about...Fly over for what?? Both B & C are already sooo advanced; You are definitely doing a fine job with them.